Winter Paine

[DroopySnoopy]

I just wrote this as I was sitting here...you all got the inner poet inspired in me. :D

Here goes.

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Winter Paine

Looking through a windowpaine
underneath a winter rain
I feel you
I see you in the light

Autumn never brought a rain
the summer sun could wash away
I know you
I hold you tonight

Walk with me
comfort me
in this visceral world we all need a way

Love with me
become me
through this lonely night I feel you through the rain

Whisper out
scream and shout
I can feel the child in your heart

Walk these miles
Cry a while
Come to me I'll make this all okay

Feel this heart
Take us apart
Build us into love that won't subside

I could have lied
Could have ran
Couldn't deny the fire in your eyes

Burning high
Flaming out
Believe in me you'll never be without

Take this hand
Hold it tight
Let it comfort you throughout the night.

-Tony

[DroopySnoopy]

I think maybe people are surprised I can actually be serious for a change. :)

[teh-horace]

i like the very first 2 verses the best

i thnk since i've lost touch writing serious stuff like that, i've kinda lost how to grasp it as well

but it's still nice

[DroopySnoopy]

Well, for me, it's beautiful because it shows a raw emotion and vulnerability to both characters in the story, especially the ''opposite'' member of the equation. It bears the determination of the writer to protect and sooth the subject, calling her to run to him "Walk these miles
Cry a while
Come to me I'll make this all okay
" and aiming to bring her to the realization that he will be her comforter and security through the rough storms ahead.

And the line,
''Burning high
Flaming out
Believe in me you'll never be without" is supposed to represent the ideal that love is not always perfect, and that some battles will surely be fought, but that eternally, love is the strongest bond of all.

[TrippinBTM]

I like it, and your explanation makes perfect sense. It sucks when such a call is met with rejection, so I'll just conclude for my own peace of mind that the speaker in this poem gets his girl.

[sylvanlightning]

Rock on, smooth cadence and simply lovely.

[DroopySnoopy]

Thank you guys. I was nervous to post it at first, but I wanted to see how others viewed it. The whole story within the writing is pretty much a true to life thing to me. I have fallen madly in love, with an absolutely wonderful woman, and the night I wrote this, I could not take her off my mind, not that I ever WANTED to.

I wanted it to convey the feeling of trust and commitment between partners, and that feeling of knowing that someone out there would walk the earth for you and your safety and comfort and happiness.

I would like to say that every line in this story comes straight from the heart, and I only hope that others can feel the love shining through each and every line.

Thanks guys. :)

-Tony

[DroopySnoopy]

Sorry for bumping here, but I had a really rough night, last night and I pulled this out of my notebook and read it again, and it actually made me feel a bit better.

I guess there is great power in words after all.

[J0hn]

Enjoyed reading that poem. Had a dream last night that kind of inspired me to write a book. But anyway, I See so many poems on here that don't get any recognition. i have taken a dab at poetry but remain invisible. Guess this world is rather bizarre:(

[Faerie Jane]

Beautiful imagery DS. This peice is quite lovely. Thank you for sharing.

[J0hn]

Just to say a new arts creativity whatever has just landed in the uk forums Art and creativity etc section. Check the huge Welcome title.


You,me and anyone else might stand more chance of gaining recognition. Though any recognition on here is counted for and appreciated. I hope not to be the invisible man like so many talented gems on here and that someone would atleast say something. :)

[DroopySnoopy]

Thank you, J0hn, I will give it a look. :)

[teh-horace]

i still really like those first 2 verses :)

[DroopySnoopy]

Thank you!