Empty Flavors

[AcousticPeace]

HER COAR WAS WHITE, BRIGHT AND CATCHY
RANGES OF SPLATTERED SPONGES ARRAY
RAINBOW VICTORY DEFEATED ONLY NONE
GONE BEFORE THE LAST ONE LEAVES
RARE MOMENTS SLIP OUT OF REACH
WAITING FOR HAPPINESS ONE LAST TIME
AWAKE TO THE LAUGHTER OF LOVE
ONLY LIFE IS WHATS TAKEN AWAY

GROUND SPLITTING SNOW GATHERS
FLAVORED DREAMS DONT COME TRUE
CARELESS HAD FORGOTTEN THE REST
LAYING ON COOL BRICK STIFFENS
SOUR CENTER DOES NOT HELP HEAT
POWERFULL PINTS OF ELECTRIC PAINTS
STRIKING MATTER OF YOUNG JUNGLES
BRAVE PETALS CONCUR LIONS BEAUTY
SLIPPERY NOTES ON MELODY
NOT MUCH LONGER CAN WE TAKE THE ABUSE
ONLY LIKE IS WHATS TAKEN AWAY

GLARE AT THE ROTTEN GROUND
UNFAIR TO TRASH A GIFT YOU'RE GIVEN
UNEXPECTED PURPOSES FULFILLED ON TIME
REMAIN AWARE UNTIL FURTHUR NOTICED
FORWARD RETURNS US BACK TO SQUARE ONE
NOT MUCH LONGER CAN WE TAKE THE ABUSE
ONLY LIFE IS WHATS TAKE AWAY



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what so u think? i wrote it in caps so i decided to type it in caps..
i was really slow when i wrote this and i just put down whatever came to my mind. so i thought i would share it and see what you think.

[deep_blue_death03]

Wow, this poem says a whole lot and is full of many feelings. I like the strange placement of words and the overall feel of it. Excellent!!! You said you wrote it real slow......was you stoned? =)

[AcousticPeace]

yes. i was stoned. haha i wrote a bunch more. dont feel like typing them out now.. i'll get around to it