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[sweetdreadlover]

Changing faces in front of me

Smiling at me so blankly
I don't understand the fake painting of a
man with no feeling
The world is undermined
and the life i live is a shadow
of this mans falling hand
i look through the looking glass
and i patch together my life once more
i try and steer my mind back towards
the place i once knew as mine
the world will still turn
the sky will still fall
irony is ironic
in this strange new world...

[Moonjava]

irony is ironic
in this strange new world...
Beautiful ending :)

[toolab]

Wow! Great Poem. It touches the soul and that's what poetry is all about. I wrote a similar piece called "In From the Darkness". Be on the look-out for it. I'm posting it before the end of the week. Keep on writing, I enjoy reading your stuff.

Peace,

ALI

[borut16]

Nice poem.

Especially, I like these lines:
Smiling at me so blankly
I don't understand the fake painting of a
man with no feeling

It kinda reminds me of Sonic Youth's song Plastic Sun (plastic girl, with plastic eyes, lala) for some reason. :)

Good write,
keep up the good work!

Love,
Borut

P.S.:Happy birthday; I'm quite sure you weren't 20 when I last saw you!

[sweetdreadlover]

aww thanks you guys...and yes borut i turned 20 on june 22....thank you for the happy birthday:)...and i never thought about it being like that song too borut....great point but now i feel like i sorta ripped it off...lol....

[Trixie]

ahhh..now a question for you sweetdreadlover..., what inspired you to write this piece?!
I find it has a voice that speaks for itself, strongly in fact. You can really tell, those who have put their hearts into their words...

[Purple_Burnt_Squirre]

I agree the flow and so deep it transcends like rain in a forest so magical that you switch off to anything else while reading I didn't hear the tv and it has to be damn good when that happens :)

[sweetdreadlover]

ahhh..now a question for you sweetdreadlover..., what inspired you to write this piece?!
I find it has a voice that speaks for itself, strongly in fact. You can really tell, those who have put their hearts into their words...





honestly i was sitting here and started writing..thats how most of them come about:)

[kahlil]

I have this dream sweet dreaded lover :Dabout all of us at the hipforums, we can get together like friends and begin this poetry revolution, we can bring back awareness, You know over the past year I have been touring in Africa(where i live) promoting my poems and alot of the times i get off the stage and i think to myself noone understands what i am feeling, and then i log onto the net with my labtop and read your posts and i want to somehow grab you and bring you here! you write like it is your job i have not a single doubt that it is your calling on this earth.


love,
k.

[sweetdreadlover]

wow i never thought about it like that...