I don't know about this one...Title?

[DJTrinitee]

And when the cuts don't hurt anymore
and the bleeding has surpassed the pain.
When the lies you tell shift silently into truths
and I believe in you again,
this is where I'll be.

Too far from heaven.
Too close to hell.

And everything is the color of jade.
A hint of peace belies the truth that
tangles on our tongues.
We are the reason we don't believe.
Faith casts too many shadows
And we are afraid of the dark.

[sweetdreadlover]

first of all beautiful work! second of all how about Shadows??

[DJTrinitee]

thanks, by the way...... I like shadows, actually..... I was just super stuck and couldn't think of a decent logical title.....



~Trin

[sweetdreadlover]

I think shadows fits it quite well...beautiful word usage by the way ;)

[mebesideme]

Wow, sweetdreadlover, that was a little big.


Nice poem, I think shadows fits very well.

[sweetdreadlover]

little big?? i like my making my points in very large red letters..lol..sorry bout that....

[queenannie]

I think you should call it 'In Between'

[DJTrinitee]

haha....sam? interesting.....

[sweetdreadlover]

is it just me or is this forum suppose to be for constructive critisism...anyways....when are ya gonna post soem more beautiful work for us to read babe???

[DJTrinitee]

lol.... as soon as I'm inspired.....



~Trin

[sweetdreadlover]

ill be waiting and watching for more ;)

[toolab]

Excellent vibes. I really liked the poem and the way it flows so easily. Please send more. If you care enough to read it, I'm posting a poem as a follow-up to yours. It's called "In from the Darkness". Enjoy.


ALI

[theGalen]

maybe "Slowly Bleeding"

[iscreamchocolate]

artificial life.. or ummm... Faded... stain filled heart, ummm.. opened wounds.. umm haa haaa not totally sure.. those are just ideas haa haa

[DJTrinitee]

lol.... I think sam's growing on me.... either way, here's my latest.... It's called "Generation":


http://hipforums.com/forums/showthread.php?t=16795



~Trin