the blood of the queen

[ripple23]

The morning has on
its gray mask
in the museums of stone and light

In the garden
she thinks twelve horses pull the sun

In the bathroom, a mirror
that cannot hold her face
and the sound of weeping.

(this is all so much like the future
when there is only time and ocean
mixing darkly at her feet.)

in the garden you are waiting for
a horse that never comes
and a feeling that wakes you to
the solitary bird of dreams.

how open-ended the night is,
crossing the stale waterways.

[sweetdreadlover]

wow im amazed no one has responded to you with your work..i love how you use your words to make sooo much sense. i love it when words arent muddled together and make you wonder whats going on with it...i love the crispness...keep it up ;)

[ripple23]

:) thanks, i used to have a couple trust worthy fans, but they have disappeared! however, i cannot complain because i don't comment much on other people's stuff... probably for the same reason they don't comment on mine, cannot relate.

[MoonlightSilver]

Ok. I love all your poetry. It is all like little glimses into some bigger picture of a story. You can definantly tell that beauty is your inspiration in writing. Some of your stuff reminds me of mine also. I still haven't looked into Lorca yet, but I will when I get a chance to actually sit down and read it deeply.

There is one thing that bothers me about your stuff. Well not bothers me like it's annoying, or I don't like it, but bothers me like it makes me think about it ... Correct me if I am wrong because I very well may be, but it seems like all or most of your poems say "she" and "you". I guess sometimes you are personifying objects or ideas, but some of them sound like you are writing to an imaginary person. Is there a real person behind any of your poems besides yourself?

[ripple23]

There is one thing that bothers me about your stuff. Well not bothers me like it's annoying, or I don't like it, but bothers me like it makes me think about it ... Correct me if I am wrong because I very well may be, but it seems like all or most of your poems say "she" and "you". I guess sometimes you are personifying objects or ideas, but some of them sound like you are writing to an imaginary person. Is there a real person behind any of your poems besides yourself?i know i know i know, i've been thinking about trying to stop that! but when i write i don't really think very much it just comes out so it's hard because i rely more on images and sounds and these things 'come to me' basically whole so it's really difficult to change them once they are written down. BUT i know that if i was reading it having not written it, i would be confused with all that too...

I think that the you or she personifying objects and ideas is exactly right sometimes, and other times they are people... is there a real person behind ANY of my poems? yes... is there a real person behind ALL of my poems.. definitely not. other times i'm speaking to myself saying 'you', or i guess i could be speaking to someone imaginary... i am quite the dreamer... then again i have had a few relationships both long and short so some of it comes out of that too...

i also have writing ADD, i start poems thinking about one thing and then end them thinking about something completely different. that's part of the reason i like to write pieces with 3 or 4 lines becuase i dont' get lost in them as much... however i hope other people get lost in them MORE.

[littleskinny]

I have poetry ADD too - totally relate.


While yes I agree it is hard to relate directly to your work (not being Ripple23 n all), I get a lot out of them. Just in responding never quite sure what! The imagery and sound you strive so hard to use is bliss, and your rhythms are seductive too. I like yer stuff.

This one's a bit longer than your usual offerings!

[MoonlightSilver]

Plus, I think the reason I knew all that about your stuff is because I do the exact same thing alot of the time. Keep going if that's what you like and if that's what makes you feel good. I've been feeling stuck lately. Like I am sick of sounding like I always sound when I write, but I can't help it...that's what comes out. I dont care about that when I am just writing to make myself feel better of figure something out, but when I am in the mood to write something really good or write about some premeditated thing, I want to be able to express myself in other styles. It's hard...

[ripple23]

Plus, I think the reason I knew all that about your stuff is because I do the exact same thing alot of the time. Keep going if that's what you like and if that's what makes you feel good. I've been feeling stuck lately. Like I am sick of sounding like I always sound when I write, but I can't help it...that's what comes out. I dont care about that when I am just writing to make myself feel better of figure something out, but when I am in the mood to write something really good or write about some premeditated thing, I want to be able to express myself in other styles. It's hard...ahh the BEST and perhaps ONLY solution is to read! that's how you learn to write, by reading other people, it's not copying, it's taking in a myriad of influences to shape your own style... many of the people who post on here clearly don't do that (generalization i know) and i can tell by reading their writing. so try taking a break from writing and read a few different poets (who write differently preferably.... this usually works for me.

and if you ever need suggestions on WHO to read... well just ask!