Want some feedback on my poems..

[only_emo_kid]

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[sweetdreadlover]

once again as ive seen commonly the words are slightly muddled....im not sure if you can still view old threads but try looking up some old poems by a member called gweedo....im not telling you that you should write like him....but he gives off some awesome inspiration....trust me...good luck i think you are definitely talented:)

[only_emo_kid]

alright Thx.. and I searched for that person but couldn't even find them or anything mentioning them... =\

[kahlil]

Hi there only-elmo-kid (whew quite a name ;),

Well I went to your website and read all of your works and especially enjoyed "

Don't bring that s)*& on me,nothing,waiting and tonight. First of all let me say I did not for a second regret going or spendin as much time as i did reading them because You ARE TALENTED! which really really helps in poetry anyways I have a few questions for you if you don't mind. Like how old are you? Since when ahve you have you been compelled to write, What are some personal qualities you can describe yourself with and or are described as. I was intrigued by all these visions of who or how you are, so let me know if i went way off but I felt alot of your poems were (pls understand this the right way) the same kind of way I started writing when i was a teenager, you know the constant shifting of standards you are pressed to acknolwedge & the amount of distrust and betrayal and the surge of all these powerful emotions and you are moved to write and it all arrives but its kinda messy and unorgainized, the only thing i felt about your writin gwas that yo ueitheri oversimplified or overcomplexified(nice word) some of what you were feeling, your feelings are PROFOUND PERIOD, i think you shouldnt restrict yourself to rhyme schemes or anything allow the torrent of your raw gift to flow but at the same time try to make puddles of your poems gather the emotions seperately and observe them ostracize them dissect them do as your heart and mind feel , don't restrict yourself ORGANIZE your thoughts is all. When iread your post i remebered myself (all of my life) begging people to read my work being critiscizerd how amny times i felt the critiscms were too much and how i wanted to give up,and how i ran after trying to find this style and that kinda feedback it was only when i stepped away from what i wanted people to read and started listening to my own voice was I ever content, I want you to know that at any time with any of the works you write I am more than willing to read and give you my honest opinion, I hope you grow and keep developing your voice it is one I myself would like to hear, more often openly expressed.
Sincerely and with my utmost respect for your work,
K.

[KittenX]

Yeesh, I'm jealous of that reply, I wish I would have received the same kinda welcome when I first started my thread...

[only_emo_kid]

Hi there only-elmo-kid (whew quite a name ;),

Well I went to your website and read all of your works and especially enjoyed "

Don't bring that s)*& on me,nothing,waiting and tonight. First of all let me say I did not for a second regret going or spendin as much time as i did reading them because You ARE TALENTED! which really really helps in poetry anyways I have a few questions for you if you don't mind. Like how old are you? Since when ahve you have you been compelled to write, What are some personal qualities you can describe yourself with and or are described as. I was intrigued by all these visions of who or how you are, so let me know if i went way off but I felt alot of your poems were (pls understand this the right way) the same kind of way I started writing when i was a teenager, you know the constant shifting of standards you are pressed to acknolwedge & the amount of distrust and betrayal and the surge of all these powerful emotions and you are moved to write and it all arrives but its kinda messy and unorgainized, the only thing i felt about your writin gwas that yo ueitheri oversimplified or overcomplexified(nice word) some of what you were feeling, your feelings are PROFOUND PERIOD, i think you shouldnt restrict yourself to rhyme schemes or anything allow the torrent of your raw gift to flow but at the same time try to make puddles of your poems gather the emotions seperately and observe them ostracize them dissect them do as your heart and mind feel , don't restrict yourself ORGANIZE your thoughts is all. When iread your post i remebered myself (all of my life) begging people to read my work being critiscizerd how amny times i felt the critiscms were too much and how i wanted to give up,and how i ran after trying to find this style and that kinda feedback it was only when i stepped away from what i wanted people to read and started listening to my own voice was I ever content, I want you to know that at any time with any of the works you write I am more than willing to read and give you my honest opinion, I hope you grow and keep developing your voice it is one I myself would like to hear, more often openly expressed.
Sincerely and with my utmost respect for your work,
K.

Alright lemme answer your questions and Thank you for the interest you showed and your good things to say for me... (I needed it at this moment) I'm 18.. I've been writing for about 2 years I believe.. (don't know how it started, just outta nowhere I wrote down my thoughts and put them together into my writings) I've always been told i'm quiet. I used to be really shy.. i'm kinda outgoing.. but definitly not with my emotions. Only share them with people I trust, and I don't trust many... I used to not share my poetry with anyone either. But lately I have, because I need the feedback and attention (I know it sounds dumb, but I don't get it often) I have to write to keep myself living, cause sometimes I just break down. And I find I can't write unless i'm upset, or depressed. But I hate when i'm that way because i'm hurting. I don't have many people I can share my feelings with either because most don't care or I can't trust them.. I really don't have someone to talk to when I need it either. So I have to write to try and feel better.. I honestly don't know whut else to say now, because i'm pretty down right now...

[Musikero]

What happened to your drawings? I clicked and there was nothing there.


Anyway, I liked "Waiting". I'm going back to read some more.

[only_emo_kid]

haven't added drawings... and waiting.. I wrote for the girl i'm currently with... she's a trip, she gets me down... and she makes me the happiest... but gosh i'm so depressed and down right now

[sweetdreadlover]

alright Thx.. and I searched for that person but couldn't even find them or anything mentioning them... =\
hmmm try pming him....i know seths around here sopmewhere...tell him i sent you after him and youd like to see some of his poetry...trust me his work inspires me :)

[only_emo_kid]

anyone have any other thoughts? Thx