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floyd4peace
03-28-2006, 05:26 AM
the sky opened clear
a creak appeared
through it i was inhaled
then spit back, unveiled

unveiled of altered knowledge
and the pavement split
through it marriage
of terms spoken and writ

so into darkness i decended
mental wounds mended
until the darkness ceased
my cured self released

i came to realization
and nothing was itself
but a symbol of what is true
then i was left

alone with my perceptions
my living dreams
with their dreamy lives
that's how it seems

they speak to me in languages
of the tongue, not eyes
while i communicate my purpose
through a soul which never dies

until reaching a day
whith which there's no sould left
to communicate

TheLizardKingMike
03-28-2006, 05:42 AM
That's really good man. It's got a nice rhyme with good imagery. Keep on truckin' bud.

floyd4peace
03-31-2006, 03:57 AM
thanks man

sunshine and pearls
04-01-2006, 06:18 AM
very good poem with good line enjambments great job especially for someone of your age.

floyd4peace
04-02-2006, 01:12 AM
thank you. i wrote that one night when i went to sleep for about five minutes and woke up with some images in my mind.