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TheLizardKingMike
03-22-2006, 07:21 PM
In my life
I have had but one regret
And that is not taking you
When I had the chance

In my life
I have had but one fear
And that was that I
Would wait too long
To hold you near
And that you would be gone

And of course I did
And you are
I blew it
I am a joke
And I think you knew it

Now nothing looks as good
Or tastes as sweet
And it won’t
Unless we finally meet

Can’t you see
What this is doing to me?
I am a wreck
A flaming pile

Don’t you know
That I would do anything
Just to see you smile?

I cannot go on
Living in this hell
A malicious torment
That I know very well

My love is a hefty burden
A heavy, heavy load
I keep to myself
What should have been told

Won’t you listen
To my solemn sorrow?
Will you still
Talk to me tomorrow?

Is there not
A shred of hope?
I am constantly
Sliding down
This fickle slope

Am I writing in vain?
Will it never
Be the same?

You have slipped between my fingers
Like sand in an hourglass
Time
If only I could
Turn back
The hands of time

I long for the days
When you felt
What I do
What I have
Since I first saw you

Has your love
For me died?
If so, why?

I need to know
What you feel
I know we could have
Something real

Now it’s your turn
Tell me if your fire
Still burns
I can only hope

General Electric
03-24-2006, 11:37 PM
Seemed to drag on a little towards the end... Not the style I usually enjoy but I did this one, it's good :)

TheLizardKingMike
03-25-2006, 04:23 AM
I hear you, this is actually the longest piece I've written so far. There's parts I like and some I don't. I'll probably cut some out. Anyway, thank you for your input, I appreciate it.

General Electric
03-25-2006, 05:01 AM
No problem :) I'm sure a lot of people will be able to relate to it; I know I can, and after reading it again more carefully I find that it's better than I first thought. With just a little work it could have more quality.

TheLizardKingMike
03-25-2006, 05:05 AM
I agree.