High Hopes

[TheLizardKingMike]

Stand in the doorway
Creep closely
Again she froze
Confusion closing
Absent mind
Quiver

Short circuit
Warped maze of wires
Combustion
Florescent flames

Sunburst unprepared
Came to clouds
Flew too high
Burn out

Once more to soar
With spirit torn
The final flight
To plummet to earth
High hopes

[Tigerbeam]

seems like too much imagery, not enough meaning.

[TheLizardKingMike]

I know what you're saying. I like the juxaposition, and it does tell a sort of story. BUt I understand what you mean. Thanks for the reply.

[foundme]

i like your quote but the poem is kinda confusing..but that doesn't mean it isn't good