God is Dead

[Jerry]

Slowly through the years
we lose our moral years
and slowly sin
comes creepin' in
A lost generation
starting to get loose
without hesitation
tighten' their eternal noose
And now with our desires feed
we turn to cliam
...God is dead

[Mordiana]

Wasn't it nietzche comming up with the god is dead thing? nietzche is cool (sorry if I misspell the name, its complicated and I'm stoned).


The poem btw, is not too bad.
(are you christian?)

[tpgi]

john proctor said it too

[Bhaskar]

Slowly through the years
we lose our moral years
and slowly sin
comes creepin' in
A lost generation
starting to get loose
without hesitation
tighten' their eternal noose
And now with our desires feed
we turn to cliam
...God is dead
Indded, God is dead.

Dead to desire, dead to duality.
Dead to ignorance.

God has annihilated ego.

Do the same, become one with all.

[Jerry]

the point of the poem is that God is not dead, read it again

[El Capitan]

im the wrong place again.

[gottssunfire]

Well Jerry since there are people who feel that god is dead, and since there have been people saying it for about a century, you may want to assert your point a bit more firmly. If the goal of your poem is to be interpreted a specific way, that is. At this point it really can be read either way.

Also, you might want to try and hammer the meter in lines 5-8, because at the moment I can't really find how it's supposed to flow.

It's an interesting theory though, that we claim god is dead because we don't feel his 'love' anymore as a direct result of our actions. At the same time... I present to you that debauchery has been an ongoing theme in nearly all social groups throughout history, religious institutions included. So why is it that only in the last century do we declare god dead?

[TrippinBTM]

God is not dead, we are dead to God. That's what I think he's saying. I don't think he needs to change it either, I think you just have to pay attention when you read it. Not all poetry is laid out all simple and easy.

[Bhaskar]

Exactky. ReaD, think, know.

[El Capitan]

God is not dead, we are dead to God. That's what I think he's saying. I don't think he needs to change it either, I think you just have to pay attention when you read it. Not all poetry is laid out all simple and easy.read what?