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joo kyle
11-16-2005, 04:42 AM
she walks the world as it wraps around her finger
walking threw the shadows she knew only to find her lost in place to find running threw the wilderness as it comes crashing
the lake she walks moves only foward as it drains into her desert

I'm kinda starting writing poetry I have ideas in my head and I'm just trying to get them out so go easy on me it's an early attempt.

sylvanlightning
11-17-2005, 06:02 AM
I really enjoyed the content.
Your images flow...
perhaps making

shorter sentences,
would give them more
space to breathe.

Well done.