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bradofcentralpa
05-09-2004, 07:56 AM
i apoligize it took the form of a shitey poem, but sometimes easier, however pretensious seeming:

Is that old impassive rock not alive?
Could it have tricked its mind into believing it wills my path obstructed by its weight?
Could I not be a boulder's hands, moving other boulders at its commands?
My hand surely is not alive--
But would I ask it?
And when it answer--for an answer, positive or negative, is always there-- would i believe it? would I believe that it answered?
I have tricked myself into believing my brain enslaves my body when a dialogue exists between all parts.
I do hope, for his sake, that my friend, the rock has no delusions of grandeur...that he controls the wind which dries his flesh, or the river moves his earthen legs;
And I hope the same for myself.

themnax
05-11-2004, 12:54 PM
hey that was fun

and please don't call your efforts "shitty"
we are all too fallable to relyably judge ourselves

honeyhannah
05-12-2004, 12:55 AM
hey that was fun

and please don't call your efforts "shitty"
we are all too fallable to relyably judge ourselves
I didn't think it was shitty at all.

I really enjoyed it.

fractalated
05-12-2004, 01:32 AM
hey that was really cool :)

Applespark
05-14-2004, 08:31 AM
beautiful;)

bradofcentralpa
05-17-2004, 07:43 PM
thanks...i thought nobody would ever reply

Tamee
06-03-2004, 04:49 PM
liked it..........

mikopanic
07-26-2004, 01:13 AM
i think it is important that nobody has delusions of grandeur

cerridwen
11-25-2004, 03:34 PM
interesting...

2cool
05-02-2005, 05:18 AM
Pretty cool. I liked it. TY 4 posting.