Acid_Rain
06-23-2004, 09:21 PM
just an introspective piece, please give constructive criticism:
Listen. I am alone, all alone. People move lightly around me, scatter themselves about, but i am still alone. I felt someone brush my shoulder--a touch of reality, but no unification. I hear footsteps and realize they're passing by me--passing me by. They stop, then start again, but ultimately they'll go, leaving me behind them.
Why am I alone? I think, well, i thought that no one was; but it's true that I am. I am alone because it's obligation, not choice. It's true for all of us though right? Everyone leaves, and everyone is left--it's nature. Humanity is nature, but only a small part of it...therefore we can alter it, but it can't exactly change it. Nature does what it has to, does what it was taught to do. Nature isn't lonely; I am.
I have found that we are all alone, but not every is lonely. Some people are given a slice of companionship, to soothe the pain of alone. Passion can ease alone, but not erase it. Your souls are connected for a brief time; but not forever. After lust takes over and then passes over, all that's left is an ache. A need for more....something else. A need for eternity--but that escaped as easily as you caught it.
I was in love once. I thought I had lost alone, but it was still there. Resting, waiting in the back of my mind. A simple touch coudln't make it go away, a whisper couldn't capture it, and a kiss could never smother it. Even so, I had my temporary completeness. Now, when I look in the mirror I see my reflexion. It stares at me, it mocks me. I run my fingers across the glass, but it's cold. There is no warmth to absorb from myself. I look again. I am alone.
Listen. I am alone, all alone. People move lightly around me, scatter themselves about, but i am still alone. I felt someone brush my shoulder--a touch of reality, but no unification. I hear footsteps and realize they're passing by me--passing me by. They stop, then start again, but ultimately they'll go, leaving me behind them.
Why am I alone? I think, well, i thought that no one was; but it's true that I am. I am alone because it's obligation, not choice. It's true for all of us though right? Everyone leaves, and everyone is left--it's nature. Humanity is nature, but only a small part of it...therefore we can alter it, but it can't exactly change it. Nature does what it has to, does what it was taught to do. Nature isn't lonely; I am.
I have found that we are all alone, but not every is lonely. Some people are given a slice of companionship, to soothe the pain of alone. Passion can ease alone, but not erase it. Your souls are connected for a brief time; but not forever. After lust takes over and then passes over, all that's left is an ache. A need for more....something else. A need for eternity--but that escaped as easily as you caught it.
I was in love once. I thought I had lost alone, but it was still there. Resting, waiting in the back of my mind. A simple touch coudln't make it go away, a whisper couldn't capture it, and a kiss could never smother it. Even so, I had my temporary completeness. Now, when I look in the mirror I see my reflexion. It stares at me, it mocks me. I run my fingers across the glass, but it's cold. There is no warmth to absorb from myself. I look again. I am alone.