Oh sunrise

[Communism]

The smell of gunpowder
Filling my nostrils
The fervor spread across the battlefield
Where men once bravely fought

[bee]

[QUOTE=Communism]The smell of gunpowder
Filling my nostrils
The fervor spread across the battlefield
Where men once bravely fought

i think it was gd but u need to read though it and think does that make sense so u need to edit it kk but it was fair gd well done gd try.
i would have done something like this ....



as i walk though the battlefild people fought people died beond my feet i carryed on walking the sun was bright then suddly and crush band and anennurmus bome blow up but i was the only one left out of all them lot of people that died 5 million out of all that lot i am glad i am an live today.


kk
that is an draft xxxxbeexxxx
peace up to the world dudes:rolleyes: