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TundraLotus
08-16-2005, 07:54 PM
familliarity with
the archetypes of trauma
licking at the primal wound
vigilant and gaurded
glaring my teeth.
lash again, lash again
temporally resigned to this
submission self imposed

for all too long the cauldren boiled
turbulence inverting on itself
an inner world of fantasy
to replace the unbearable
protect and hide away, the personal spirit
from small self's self destruction
within those fatal breathing spirals,
no stratification could occur
no solace in blindly fueling wraths

ripping tendrils of attachment
fire still burns
cauldren still mixes
but there is a stone suspended
by an unseen force
sphereical quadrantized tertiary pentagramic
geodisic heart
approximate perfection, precise
half light, half dark
irridescent full spectrum consciousness

words spill "well..."
boom like thunder rolling on the horizon
this substance of today, i am
will be whittled on again
exposed to ultra violet catastrophe
the paths of my past
act as teachers
feathers on a duck's back
shedding caustic fluids
make them bead like water

new matters will concrescence
just being
exerting their purifying presence
the present
to try to inhale all senses of Mother's tongue
i get a billion selfs, per diamond vehicle
less miles found in a gallons
when saught, speak, until then
speak the sound that orchids make--
an old man once said
"i like to create emotion!"
in affect, bonding, a cosmic unity caulk is found

EternalHunter
08-17-2005, 02:28 AM
"but there is a stone suspended
by an unseen force
sphereical, quadrantized, tertiary, pentagramic
geodisic heart
approximate perfection, precise
half light, half dark"

speak the sound that orchids make--
an old man once said
"i like to create emotion!"
in affect, bonding, a cosmic unity caulk is found"

These bits are absolutely perfect! I just have one question. You started off using very little, if any, punctuation, but in the last two stanzas there are ubiquitous commas etc. I realize why you chose not to use periods, but what did you intend by the rest?

Peace

TundraLotus
08-17-2005, 03:38 AM
wish i could give you an explanation, but there is none, cept to maybe pause a few of the things i wanted to communicate, or just use the words i did, without having to use any modifiers between them to show they go together.

glad you enjoyed

TrippinBTM
08-17-2005, 04:24 PM
Man, what a ride you took me on. Groovy poem man!

sylvanlightning
05-27-2007, 04:53 AM
ripping tendrils of attachment
fire still burns
cauldren still mixes
but there is a stone suspended
by an unseen force
sphereical quadrantized tertiary pentagramic
geodisic heart
approximate perfection, precise
half light, half dark
irridescent full spectrum consciousness
Been a long time, my friend... love to see your current work!

Condensed and super-potent... thank you for all your poetic offerings. :)

-Bev-
05-27-2007, 08:55 PM
4th verse I especially like.
good stuff! :]

Miss_Beatle
05-28-2007, 08:37 AM
I really liked it :)

thcinfectedhair
05-29-2007, 03:59 PM
speechless homie..im jelious.