stutter (march 05)

[pancreatic_insanity]

tell the world off
in one stutter,
amazing,
the art
of deception.
take one word
and stretch it out,
the problems
of communication.
take as long as you want
to get your point across.
maybe people will listen harder,
write a story
to fill a page
fill the air with stutters.
-danei

[monarch]

i thought it was alright. i liked the last line, 'fill the air with stutters,' it brought the whole poem together for me =)

[TrippinBTM]

Kinda choppy, but I get the feeling it's intentional, so it's alright. I agree, the last line really closes it well. I like what you're saying there.