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ripple23
07-16-2005, 02:27 AM
never so weary of contentment as when
the cool lights descend
on a momentary shadow
naked, asleep on cigarette ashes
blown from the windowsill's dark oak meandering

the breath of a fan fills the room with
the night and the crying of bonfires
that expose

your silhouettes
straight-eyed and smoke stained
lounging outside of every doorway
where stars,
obscure and golden,
crouch behind your white body, equally as dividing

KittenX
07-16-2005, 03:28 AM
Loveliness, title is most excellent.

ripple23
07-16-2005, 04:30 AM
yeah...actually.... i just entirely switched the poem. oh well. but anyways, thanks kitten

KittenX
07-16-2005, 04:40 AM
Still very enjoyable.

sylvanlightning
07-16-2005, 04:46 AM
Very nice, well done.

EternalHunter
07-16-2005, 05:49 AM
I'm glad you're back! I love this poem.

steffan
07-17-2005, 05:46 AM
that was good

TrippinBTM
07-18-2005, 12:55 AM
very nice, I enjoyed reading it. :)

gdhmomchild
07-18-2005, 04:26 AM
Great read. ~ty~

fulmah
07-19-2005, 01:09 AM
excellent execution here! the imagery is top notch, the flow is just right... really, this was a perfect read... kudos!

ripple23
07-19-2005, 11:43 PM
thank ya everyboody