In my opinion my best poem

[Duck]

I accept my fate; my destiny long sealed
I feel no need for cover, no reason to shield
Instead I walk out into a grassy field
not a soul for miles I sink into nowhere
I see a beautiful flower and lay near
I turn my head to the heavens and I stare
Clouds float on by
Slowly lingering through the sky
The image is mirrored in my eye
Suddenly the image is torn
Replaced by one newly born
And my eyes are scorn
The new image, an image of light
Peeking through the sun is so bright
Overcome, my eyes ignite
However, no fiery ray
Shall disturb my lay
The image in my eye does stay
And the whole time behind
Chaotic horror fills my mind
All kinds of terrors intertwined
Visions of extreme pain
Families being slain
Molten lava mocks pouring rain
Then I see a severed head
Somehow it is not the slightest bit dead
I will never forget what it said
It told me of fire
My inner burning desire
That head must have, no could not be a liar
The fact that I will never truely know
Is my greatest rival, most formidable foe
But the fight must be let go
Eternally ill
The thoughts are storms never still
So all I can do is wait until...
Wait 'till I run out of breath
No peace, no rest
Until my death

[heron]

it has too much rhyme. I know its a poem, but ever second and third line shouldnt rhyme with the first. That takes cat and the hat to a whole new level. If you must rhyme, which I personally only like in very small doses, add non rhyming line between the two.

I think you had some good imagery going, but, and it may just be me, bu the cat in the hat style lost my interest quickly.

I hope i am not discouraging, all that I said was in hopes of helping refine your style.

[Duck]

it has too much rhyme. I know its a poem, but ever second and third line shouldnt rhyme with the first. That takes cat and the hat to a whole new level. If you must rhyme, which I personally only like in very small doses, add non rhyming line between the two.

I think you had some good imagery going, but, and it may just be me, bu the cat in the hat style lost my interest quickly.

I hope i am not discouraging, all that I said was in hopes of helping refine your style. yeah I know what you mean, I don't usaully rhyme as much, that's just how this one worked out

[Shampoo]

i agree with the to much rhyme and at some places it's confusing but isn't life?