one of the first poems i wrote

Discussion in 'Art' started by headtrip4559, Jul 27, 2014.

  1. headtrip4559

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    " The Tattered Road"

    As You walk along lifes tattered road,
    It's paved with nails, Not laced with gold.

    People dance around the fire,
    Fueled by greed and man's desire.

    They'll throw there souls into the flames,
    For fancy cars, Or diamond rings....

    This world's no longer spiritual,
    The goals became material.

    The children that set foot on Earth,
    Will be confined and blind at birth.

    A holocaust of God's creation,
    Set in motion by all nations.

    Don't try to run when it's to late,
    There is no hiding from Your fate.

    So choose the path thats wise and bold,
    As You walk along lifes tattered road.




    let me know what you guys think please. -headtrip
     
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  2. Shin Sir

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    I like it. Eerie and true.
     
  3. headtrip4559

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    thank you
     
  4. expanse

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    That's really good! Will you be posting more?
     
  5. headtrip4559

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    didn't think about it but yeah I could. thanks for the good feedback :)
     
  6. Sandra85

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    Nice poem. continue to create poems and inspire other people.
     
  7. Moonglow181

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    another big BRAVO from me! What a poignant, wonderfully written poem........
     

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