ok ive re thought my type of writing and think i have 2 decent songs now tell me wat u think the first one is about being seperated form some1 you love and the second one is abotu how girls just waste ur time and never want to give u anything so ya let me know wat u think, these would go to pop punk music to give u an idea of the style and tempo ------------------------------------------------------------------------- We need to stop pretending Whats gunna happen We are coming to an end Soon ill have to go These days are coming to an end I wont be here for ever Lets make this night fun for all This is our last chance To do it all So here we are now We will make it some way some how One last time to confess Relax and undress In my room we fall asleep We are in way to deep I remember the times that we ditched class I would act like an ass Getting high in the woods No one ever knew I hope I see you again The past is now the present Today is the last day Of our young lives Off to college We wave good bye So here we are now We will make it someway some how One last time to confess Relax and undress In my room we fall asleep We are in way to deep Bridge* Chorus* --------------------------------------------------------------------------------- As I ponder those things you said to me I realize you are the one to blame As you put me to shame I need to know why you play these games I am always there for you and like the things you do There’s no reason why you should be wasting my time Girls a waste of time Taking something away from me But not something that I really need Things never work out for the best And I contest to the way that I feel I just need to grow up and quit being such a fuck up Why wont things change for me Please just give me a chance And ill do the rest I just want a girl that’s there for me I’m just thinking with my cock And cant you see That girls are girls are girls are Just a waste of time
honestly? They need alot of work...they are to short to say what you are trying to say which makes them confusing.The first one is way to redundent...it's a constant repeat of "hey we have to hurry before I go, so let's do it"....going back in time for half a verse then right back into the "I gotta go" theme....Please! get rid of the going to college line, that is gayer than Clay Aiken. All I can say about the second one is...Damn, you got issues. I'm not trying to bash you I am just giving my honest opinion.
LOL deepfried... if you read his shitcuntcock stuff, you'd be really impressed with this stuff...iactually really like a lot of it, except the girls are a waste of time part ;P just gotta find the right one, i hear its worth it...
I'm sorry to say I agree. Very confusing, choppy and short. You should really try and get some deeper meaning into your songs, besides the typical teenage crap. And work on your rhyming patterns, too... Just putting random rhymes in lines DOES NOT work for a good rythm to be developed.
