Actually----this is one consonant too many for a combination of 3 haiku put together-----which is more or less a variation of a tanka----one consonant too many is called ji-amari in Japanese, and is acceptable as exception if the poem works well enough. Or----I may have miscounted----having had just a little too much to drink tonight...
My first Half Moon, man cactus juice straight to the brain soul open--feeling good. You know----I don't compose haiku in English----but I thought I'd try----though this one, without explanation, would be understood by only a select group of people. But the experience was worthy of a poetic moment, and it just doesn't seem to be a Japanese one... I went to my first Half Moon Ceremony over the weekend----a type of peyote ceremony. Actually it was also my first peyote ceremony of any kind. It was incredible and left me feeling good for several days afterwards.
I have heard of that Takes you to the spirit world Have not been there yet Too bad he's so close It's been knocking at my door All day long all night The door is still locked Many keys on his key ring Looking frantically
Yeah, it's closer than you think Inside out, Outside- in everywhere Lifting the veil of reality --a peek, a sense, a shadow
Minute cactus buds becoming hairs of a furry green, green snake. the furry green snake comes undulating to the peyote songs To water-drum beat no scales just hair an intense cactus green (One of the things I saw in the Peyote Ceremony.)
No---actually I dug it---and defended it as a ji-amari tanka------coincidentally I was just now thinking of a response to that one----give me a few minutes...
Ok---here's a Tanka form of Haiku: Nippon no dansei Ima no otoko wa omanko wa yarahen ya! fuman kawaiko-chan manzuri ya (This is actually a recently developed social problem in Japan----the males are becoming to shy, or are more interested in fantasy worlds, so they aren't courting---so the birth rate has dropped considerably...) The Japanese Male The man of today won't fuck at all!! Frustrated cuties resort to 10,000 fingers! (10,000 fingers is a Japanese euphemism for female... Well, you can figure it out.)